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Skin tingling
Hands exploring everywhere
I'm shaking
Whispering for you to stop
But you just tell me to calm down
That it wont hurt

My hands rest on your chest
Pushing the best I can
But you don't budge
You just chuckle

I'm screaming at myself
I know I have to get out of here now
You unhook here
Unbutton there
You're pulling and pushing
And I'm starting to lose it

Tears forming in my eyes
But I doubt you notice
It's too dark for you to see
I just keep hoping you'll stop
You'll understand
But I'm getting weaker by the second

Fear falling away
You have complete control over this
Over me
And I hate it
I want you to stop

I'm not ready for this
I trusted you
That you would be different
Be there for me
But all you want is this
My torment
Your pleasure

I can't even scream
Everything goes black
I lost to you
Lost this battle tonight
But most of all,
I lost myself to nothing
Not love
Not hope
I lost myself to you
©2009 *Broken101
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it's about rape if you couldn't tell. no comment on this one...
enjoy
critique and comments are always welcomed and appreciated

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:iconapplechaoskiller:
...I'm sorry...i couldn't stop it

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"I stand alone to change this world, not to prove I'm the greatest, but to show everyone else hope and good still exist!"-AS

"I'm a fallen angel...I didn't fall cuz my wings got taken, I stayed cuz it's faster to save someone when ur on even ground"-AS
:iconshin-feiuruku:
........ Nice poem. I could tell it was about rape. Oop! I commented! ^^; sorry. Couldn't help it. Please don't be mad... =(

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Sparkling angel, I couldn't see
Your dark intentions, your feelings for me.
Fallen angel, tell me why?
What is the reason, the thorn in your eye?
:iconkoolchristiangal1994:
...well u got the emotions right.... wow...

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"Give me one pure and holy passion,
Give me one magnifiscent obsession,
Give me one glorious ambition for my life,
To know and follow hard after You."


"In this world you will have trouble. But take heart! I have overcome the world." ~John 16:33b
:iconimkimmy4:
well written, really catches the emotions and the feelings!
well done!

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From the Count of Monte Cristo, "Live for a day will come when you will be happy, and bless life."
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:heart: For I thank God every day for the life He has given me. I am truly blessed with kindness and love, Thank You.
:iconbroken101:
thank you. glad you think so

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Love doesn't walk away...
people do...
I want to show the world how beautiful I can be...
But the world never sees me...

R.I.P. Art Lane...you are missed dearly </3
:iconbroken101:
heh thanks I think

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Love doesn't walk away...
people do...
I want to show the world how beautiful I can be...
But the world never sees me...

R.I.P. Art Lane...you are missed dearly </3
:iconbroken101:
haha I wasn't talking about you. I have no comments on it. that's what it meant. so thanks

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Love doesn't walk away...
people do...
I want to show the world how beautiful I can be...
But the world never sees me...

R.I.P. Art Lane...you are missed dearly </3
:iconbroken101:
not your fault. really. don't blame yourslef

--
Love doesn't walk away...
people do...
I want to show the world how beautiful I can be...
But the world never sees me...

R.I.P. Art Lane...you are missed dearly </3
:iconapplechaoskiller:
i'm really sorry

--
"I stand alone to change this world, not to prove I'm the greatest, but to show everyone else hope and good still exist!"-AS

"I'm a fallen angel...I didn't fall cuz my wings got taken, I stayed cuz it's faster to save someone when ur on even ground"-AS

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