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Fall to the floor
No words can reach me
You can't hurt me anymore
So keep yelling words
They only spin around me
I no longer hear you
But I'll just keep pretending
Pretending that I'm not slowly dying
That I don't need you anymore
And I'll just keep wondering..
Where are you now..?

How did we grow apart?
All I have now are burnt memories
And I can't stop thinking of you
You made me who I used to be
I thought I'd tell you,
I'm sorry I broke us
But you broke me
Now I can't feel anything
I can't even convince myself,
That if it wasn't for you
I'd never know who I was
Because I still don't know who I am...

I told you I didn't care
Not about how far away the stars were
Or what anyone could see on the surface
Because all I needed was you
You breathe on my neck
What did you expect from this?
All we had were your made up truths
And my broken words
Leading only to my tears
And your goodbye...


We could've slowed down
Let the world stop before us
There's nothing you can do now
Just let this take me away
Because you were always alone
Alone in a crowed room with me
And I was just lost in the dark
The darkness of your eyes
The eyes that left me here with no you
That told me the last words I wanted to hear
I can't love you anymore...
I guess I thought wrong...because I was never your angel...and you were never in love
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Emokiller99 Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2009
You must be a empath. Cause you know how I'm feeling right now....



Very good though!!
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Broken101 Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2009  Student Writer
I'm sorry you feel this way...
just went through a not so great break up
but thanks
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Emokiller99 Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2009
Your welcome! :)
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zero-empathy Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2009
powerful poem, getting better with phrases I felt it's all one piece like there's beginning and story and ending.

bravoo :clap: ... and as long as you put your feelings on the papers you will live to see tomorrow ^____^ :heart:
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Broken101 Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2009  Student Writer
thank you. I try to make it almost seem like a story with a beginning and end. glad I'm getting better at that.
maybe I will.
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zero-empathy Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2009
:thumbsup: my pleasure and yea sure you keep us interested and always eager to read more of your feelings ^_______^ :iconcocoglompplz:
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LucidLivid Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2009
It is a great piece read it a couple times. Uber flow.

!S
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Broken101 Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2009  Student Writer
thank you ^^ I'm glad you think so
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Kait-lyn Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2009
So wonderfully accurate...

(-hug for the pain-)
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Broken101 Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2009  Student Writer
yea...I wish I could just say I was just guessing how this feels. that the words just came to me and I didn't feel any of this. but I do..and I hate it
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